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In many countries, a small number of people have extremely high annual incomes. These people should be required to pay a much higher rate of income tax. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In many countries, some
people
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 make a lot of
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 every year. Some
people
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 believe they should pay higher income
tax
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 to help the country. I agree with
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 idea because rich
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 can help poor
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 and support the community. On the one hand, some
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 think everyone should pay the same
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 rate. They believe it is fair because everyone works hard. Rich
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 already pay more
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 than others, so they think it is enough. If the
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 is too high, rich
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 may move to another country.
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, rich
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 have more
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, so they can help the government. The
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 from
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tax
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taxes
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 can be used for schools, hospitals, and public transport.
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, in some countries, rich
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 pay more
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 and the country uses that
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 to help
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 with low income. In my opinion,
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 who earn a lot of
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 should pay more
tax
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.
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 is good for society and can help make life better for everyone.

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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
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You clearly express your opinion on the topic.
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Your introduction and conclusion are present and clear.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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