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Writing Samples
Band 2

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

it
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It
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 argued that
water
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 must be free and easy to access, as it is an essential resource for any human. I agree with that since every human needs it to live,
furthermore
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, it's important for the general hygiene and odours, which can cause a lot of problems
of
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if
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 it's not hygienic enough. In the beginning,
water
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plays
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played
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 a major role in
human's
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human
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 lives. If someone
didn't
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doesn't
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 drink
water
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in
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for
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 4 days,
he
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they
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 will die.
Water
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make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
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73
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up 73
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% of
human
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the human
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 body
,
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;
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in addition
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, it is responsible for different functions in organs like
lungs
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the lungs
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 and heart.
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, recent studies show that
water
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 play
as
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is
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 a major factor in human external shape, skin, muscles,
eyes
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and eyes
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,
water
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 is the most important thing when we talk about
hygene
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hygiene
, as if it
not
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is not
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 hygienic enough, it can cause a lot of diseases like cancer and chronic
ill
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illness
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, which can
reach
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apply
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sometime
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sometimes
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to
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lead to
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 death.
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, studies show that Italy has the highest number of heart cancer because of the lack
at
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of
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hygene
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hygiene
 in cleaning plates

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task achievement
Your main idea is present but not fully developed. Try explaining how free water access affects people’s lives more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Add a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points. This will make your essay feel complete.
task achievement
Make sure to provide more examples and evidence to support your points. This improves the strength of your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear transitions between your ideas. This will help your essay flow better and be easier to read.
task achievement
You clearly state your opinion at the beginning, which is a good start.
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You provide examples related to health, which is relevant to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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