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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the percentage of students' opinions on various university services.
Overal
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,there are five categories to be rated .
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the
quilty
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quality
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 of technical
matter
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matters
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 in 2010 had
the
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 higher percentage
by
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of
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 69%
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then
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than
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in 2000
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2000
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2000,
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 with 65 and
finally
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 the lowest in 2005
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, which
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indicate
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 the improvement .
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while
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,
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apply
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the office resources like copying
was
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 in 2005
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at the
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the
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their
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 highest by 89 % followed
with
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by
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 2010 and 2000 .
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while
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 the
resurces
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resources
 of
electronic
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has
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have
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acculated
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accumulated
 in 2010 among the years , the
various
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variety
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 of subjects and classes presented in
university
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universities
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 with beast rate since 2000, which indicates the
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decrease
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in
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 it .
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Finally
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 the steady
of
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state of
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 buildings and facilities in all years means the origin and satisfaction of learners in it .

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • results
  • university
  • 2000
  • 2005
  • 2010
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • trends
  • responses
  • time
  • significance
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