Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money – making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Make sure to write clear sentences that express your ideas. It is important to stay focused on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea that is clear to understand.
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Avoid mixing random words that do not connect to your topic. Stick to relevant points to make your argument stronger.
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You attempt to discuss both sides of the argument, which is a good approach for this type of essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commodified
  • Authenticity
  • Cultural misunderstanding
  • Over-commercialization
  • Staged authenticity
  • Economic benefits
  • Cultural preservation
  • Cultural exchange
  • Cultural commodification
  • Tourist expectations
  • Financial support
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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