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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 about one university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In the table below, it's shown a summary of survey results about different
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 regarding students of a certain university
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Overall
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, we can see five different aspects of the university with different percentages of students with good results.
Firstly
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, we can notice that Print Resources has the highest
percentage
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 in all three different
years
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.
In addition
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, the table shows that the
percentage
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 of
this
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 aspect increased by 2% from 87% to 89% in the first 5
years
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 from 2005 to 2010, the
percentage
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 decreased by 1%.
Secondly
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, we can see that the
percentage
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 of students giving good ratings in Building/teaching Facilities didn't show any raised or fall and remained 77% in all three
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On the other hand
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, we can notice that Electronic Resources increased constantly from 2000 to 2010, starting with a
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 of 45% and after 10
years
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 it reached 88%, like Print resources.
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, the Range of modules offered always had the lowest
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 during all 10
years
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Furthermore
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, the
percentage
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 decreased by 5%, starting from 32% and reaching 27% in 2010

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • results
  • university
  • 2000
  • 2005
  • 2010
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • trends
  • responses
  • time
  • significance
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