The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years
The two pie charts
illustrtrates
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illustrate
the use of the devices to watch television in Canada
from
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18
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the 18
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to 25 age group in two different years.
Overall
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, the use of mobile
phone
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phones
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,
tablet
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tablets
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and
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, and
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flat-screen
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TV
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TVs
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is
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has
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increased
,
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;
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in contrast
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,
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desktop
computer
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computers
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,
laptop
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laptops
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and conventional
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TV demad
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TVs have seen
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was fell over the period in Canada.
Firstly
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, flat-screen
TV
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wathers
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watchers
was
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apply
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increased from 15% to 26%,
while
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the
viewers
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number
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of
smartphones
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smartphone
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were increased significantly from 8% to more than a quarter of
the
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apply
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all viewers.
Moreover
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, tablet
users
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was improved
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increased
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over the decade
with
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, with
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nearly four times more
users
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in 2009.
Lastly
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, spectators of the
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desktop
computer
was
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fell over the decade from 18% to 12%,
while
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8% decreased can be seen in laptop
users
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from 20% of
TV
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wathers
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watchers
.
Furthermore
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, conventional
TV
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users
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were fall
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fell
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significantly from 34% to just 4% of
users
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over the period of ten years in Canada. So people are moving towards mobile devices.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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