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The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates forested land in millions of
hectares
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 in various areas of the world in the three years 1990, 2000 and 2005. The different areas are six
:
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 Africa, Asia, Europe, North
America
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, Oceania and South
America
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.
Overall
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, Europe is the primary and largest area of the world from the beginning to the end of the period.
Whereas
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 other parts of the planet
are
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have
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 declined consistently.
On the other hand
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, there
some
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are some
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 areas
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that shows
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shows
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show
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 constant
foresting
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deforestation
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 through the period
like
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, like
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 Oceania. Europe start as
biggest
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the biggest
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 area that forest among others, it
start
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starts
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 with 989
hectares
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 and
stop
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ends
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in
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at
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 the end of the period
in
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with
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 1001
which
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, which
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is show
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shows
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the
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an
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increasing
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increase
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in
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over
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 the three years. There
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also
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were also
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 others
were
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that were
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 slightly increasing from 576 to 584
hectares
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which
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, which
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 is
Asia
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in Asia
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. On the other
hands
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hand
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,
there
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apply
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countries like South
America
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 , Africa
are
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have
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 steadily declined from 946 to 882 and from 749 to 691
respectively
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, respectively
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.
As well as
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 the
changing
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changes
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 in
hectares
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 of North
America
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 and Oceania
is
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are
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 still
in
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within
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 the range and
fell
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fall
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 within the range of 3
hectares
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hectares, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Hectares
  • Forested land
  • Regions
  • Distribution
  • Trends
  • Historical data
  • Deforestation
  • Urbanization
  • Outliers
  • Proportionately
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