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Band 4.5

The maps below show the seaside town of Tendiff as it as it was in 1990 and 2010.

The maps below show the seaside town of Tendiff as it as it was in 1990 and 2010.
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displayed
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displays
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 the renovation of a regional area of
tendiff
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Tendiff
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 located on
seaside
Correct article usage
the seaside
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 and development during 2010.
Overall
Linking Words
,there are modifications in infrastructure and
upgrade
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upgrades
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accommodations
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to accommodations
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Linking Words
such
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, such
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 as
Correct article usage
the king
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king
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King Hotel
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hotel
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 in 1990 and a road was constructed in 2010. A closer look
on
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at
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plan
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the plan
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 depicts that,
In
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in
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west
Correct article usage
the west
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kf
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of
 a
cafe
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cafe,
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 there was a
seaview
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sea-view
hotel
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 beside
ABC
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the ABC
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hotel
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 in 1990, but now replaced with
police
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a police
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 station.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, previously there was Arcade
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was upgraded to
supermarket
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a supermarket
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. In
southwest
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the southwest
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 direction seafood restaurant was
build
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built
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during
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in
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 2010.
Additionally
Linking Words
,
beside
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besides
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 Diamond
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beach
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Beach
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solar
Punctuation problem
, solar
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 farming was accessible by
sandhill road
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Sandhill Road
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.
However
Linking Words
, there were no
such
Linking Words
 changes
nearby
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near
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 White
beach
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 and
Atlantic
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the Atlantic
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ocean
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Ocean
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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cafe
Correct article usage
the cafe
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 with
ABC
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the ABC
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hotel
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 remained
same
Correct article usage
the same
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 as
1990
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in 1990
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.
While
Linking Words
, in
west
Correct article usage
the west
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 of Brown
beach
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 and Grey
beach
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king
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King Hotel
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hotel
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 and
Family
Correct article usage
the Family
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Use synonyms
hotel
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Hotel
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facility
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facilities
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 available respectively during 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel, beach with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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