The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar charts depict what
students
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in the UK (
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and postgraduate) decided to do
instead
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of full-time
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in 2008.
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, both types of
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took the lead in
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study,
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voluntary
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was the least common choice.
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, in all destinations, the
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of
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students
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was significantly higher than postgraduate
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. Regarding
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students
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, a significant
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of them chose to pursue
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study (29,665).
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,
further
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study contributed to the highest
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of postgraduate
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(2,2725). The
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of
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students
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who chose part-time
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and stayed unemployed was comparable. 17,735
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students
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decided to do a part-time job, which is slightly over those who stayed unemployed (16,235). In comparison, the second common choice among postgraduates was part-time
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, with 2,535. 1,625 postgraduate
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stayed unemployed. A relatively small
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of both groups chose voluntary
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, with 3,500 graduates and 345 postgraduates, which is negligible compared to other destinations.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, graduate, work, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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