you should spend about 15 mintutes on this task. there have been several complaints about the reception area where vistors to your company arrive. your manager has asked you to suggest. how the reception area could be improved. write a letter to your manager. in your letter, describe the complaints that have been made say why the reception area is important sggest how the reception area could be improved.

Dear
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, I am writing
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letter to inform you about the complaints we have been receiving for two weeks about our
reception
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area and some suggestions to improve it. As you know that our
reception
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area has an outdated design
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, but
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now it has more problems. Let me explain in
detial
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detail
.
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the
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two weeks, visitors
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complining
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complaining
about the hot temperature because
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our A.C.
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that
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is not working.
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,
outdated
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look does not provide a professional environment.
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, we need to work on looks and
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maintenance
. Basically, we should hire
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interior designer who can renovate the
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area
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our
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like there is
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a need
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of
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some pictures or sculptures which will show it is a hospital
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.
Apart from
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this
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, there is
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to update our electronic things like computers and A.C. I will not recommend you to
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a typical
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like other hospitals
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it should be somewhat different
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, like
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warm
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a warm
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place where clients feel comfortable and
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are helped
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. I hope you will like my ideas and I am looking forward
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your response. Your sincerely, Husan

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use paragraphs for separate ideas clearly. This helps the reader understand your points better.
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Check spelling mistakes, for example, 'detial' should be 'detail' and 'complining' should be 'complaining'.
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Try to be more formal in your tone, especially since this is a letter to your manager.
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You addressed the main complaints in detail, showing good understanding of the task.
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Your suggestions for improvement are thoughtful and relevant.
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