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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts give data about the reasons why
people
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 prefer to go to work by bike or by vehicle.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that biking is often chosen for health and fitness, and wellness benefits,
while
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 driving is preferred for comfort. As the chart shows, the percentage of
people
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 who choose bikes because of health and fitness is similar to those who think about pollution, with 30%. Less than a fifth of
individuals
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 use bikes because there is no problem with parking.Some
people
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 travel by bicycle
due to
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 its speed, which is faster than driving, and there is no cost, with 13% and 12% respectively. Turning to the use of
cars
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, the majority of
individuals
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 prefer to travel by car for comfort, with more than two-fifths.
Secondly
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,
people
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 drive
cars
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 because of the distance to work, with 21%.14% of
individuals
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 driving
cars
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 because they are faster than cycling , and it is the best way to carry things to work.
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, only 11% of
individuals
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 use
cars
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 since it is safer than cycling.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, individuals, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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