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When we meet someone for the first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not. Is this a good thing or a bad thing?

When we are introduced to a new person , we always have an idea about the kind of person they are and whether we want to develop our relationships with them or not
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 behaviour and considers it an unfair method to treat
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 because of how they look .
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 shouldn't be judge because of the way they look and they should be treated fairly and equally, If we decided to treat everyone based on their way of clothing there will be no value for their mindset, a lot of important
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 in the scientific feild were heated and they didn't have the opportunity that they deserved because others hated their looks,
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, Albert were ignored
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 his appearance and no body believes in him untill he proved his ability and showed his discoveries. Humans should always shed some light on the others personalities and the way they think
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 of making friends with someone who is dressed apropriately,
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 issue requires the global's attention and we need to educate children about the dangers of
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 phenomenon, If
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 started to be treated based on their look that would lead to serious problems,
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 as racist,
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, in the 18th century there were schools especially for the black race and other schools for the white race. In conclusion, we always tend to make
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judgment
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 about others' personalities based on their behaviour or how they look
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 shouldn't be the criterion for deciding whether they are good
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 or not.

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Make sure to clearly explain your main points and support them with specific examples.
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Improve the flow of your essay by using linking words and phrases to connect your ideas.
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You present a strong argument against judging people by their appearance.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • first impression
  • initial judgment
  • stereotypes
  • assess
  • non-verbal cues
  • body language
  • appearance
  • facade
  • misjudgments
  • unfair judgments
  • decision-making process
  • social situation
  • character
  • repeated interactions
  • open-mindedness
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