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Some people believe that tourist should accept social and environmental responsibility while other believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In today`s fast-paced world, some
people
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 believe that
visitor
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visitors
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 should follow social and environmental responsibility,
while
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everyone
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think
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thinks
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 that tourists should not think about
importance
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the importance
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 of the
climate
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. In my opinion,
maintain
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maintaining
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 moral values
,
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apply
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 and saving the
enviornment
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environment
 and the earth from
the
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apply
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denger
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danger
 is
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the responsiblity
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responsiblity
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responsibility
 of every human being.
To begin
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 with,
everyone
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 has to do their best to protect the
climate
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 and the land.
Due to
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this
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, if visitors are visiting any place far from their
hometown
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hometown,
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 they should behave in
good
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a good
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 manner, and
also
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 take care of the nature around them.
Furthermore
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, they should not damage the plants and trees around them, and
also
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 need to keep
clean the area
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the area clean
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, and
making
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make
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 sure they do not throw their waste around, except
dust-bin
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dustbin
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.
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, there was
a
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apply
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research done by Western Sydney University which says the authorities
has
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have
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 to charge
find
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fines
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 to the
people
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 who harm the
enviornment
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environment
, in order to
mantain
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maintain
 the
atmoshphere
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atmosphere
 of the country, and can
also
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 charge some
enviornmental
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environmental
 tax. On the other side, numerous
people
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 believe that visitors should not
take
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care about the morality and the
climate
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 of the place.
In addition
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 to
this
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,
everyone
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 who
visiting
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visits
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other
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another
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 nation
they have
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has
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 to respect
local
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the local
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 community and has to maintain good
relation
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relations
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to
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with
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 the
environments
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environment
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.
Moreover
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, maintaining the
earth
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Earth's
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climate
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 is the equal
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 of
the
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apply
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every individual.
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, there was an article in the Times of India which mentioned many kids
,
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apply
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 and tourists throwing their rubbish in the garden they visit, and
behave
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behaving
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 in
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an abbusive
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abbusive
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abusive
 manner with local
people
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. In conclusion, the need of
human
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humans
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 is society and the
enviornments
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environment
. In my view,
everyone
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including
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, including
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tourists
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tourists,
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 has to protect the
climate
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, because it is beneficial for the whole world.
People
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also
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has
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have
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 to behave well and respectfully when they
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are visting
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visting
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visiting
 abroad.

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task response
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better, such as 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally'.
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Make your examples clearer and more directly related to your main points.
task response
You presented your opinion clearly, showing your belief in environmental responsibility.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a good structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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