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The graph below shows the amount of foods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.

The graph below shows the amount of foods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.
The line graph illustrates the trends of transporting goods by four means, namely road, water, rail and pipeline, in the UK between 1974 and 2002. In 1974, roadways contributed to the largest share of
transportation
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 , accounting for approximately 50
million
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tonnes
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, followed by railways and sea routes (with 40 and around 38,
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),
while
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 the pipe network demonstrated the smallest volume of delivered items (nearly 5
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).
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 Over the next years,
transportation
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 by road continued to rise steadily, reaching the highest point of almost 90
million
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 by 2002.
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, the amount of delivery by water and pipe modes increased to approximately 60 and 30
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tonnes
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 by 1990;
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, after that year , figures demonstrated a gradual decrease to 50 and 20, respectively.
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 the delivery by sea routes recovered with a climb to roughly 55
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tonnes
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, pipeline
transportation
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 remained unchanged.
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, the logistics by rail routes fluctuated throughout the period in the range of 30
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tonnes
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, before stabilising at the initial quantity.
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,
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 by road, water and pipeline showed growth, with the
last
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 two types providing a slight drop between 1994 and 1998. Only the figure for rail remained relatively stable.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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