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The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the average percentage of people attending the
cinema
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 in the US across four different
age
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 groups between 2000 and 2011.
Overall
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,
cinema
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attendance
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 increased in all
age
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 brackets over the period, with the 15–24
age
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 group consistently showing the highest participation.
In contrast
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, individuals aged 35 and over had the lowest
attendance
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 throughout the years. In 2000, only around 1% of people aged 35 and over went to the
cinema
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,
whereas
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attendance
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 among those aged 15 to 24 was much higher, at about 15%. Over the next decade,
cinema
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-going became significantly more popular among younger people, especially the 15–24 group, which reached a peak of 51% in 2010 before slightly declining in 2011. Meanwhile, the oldest group grew gradually to reach around 12%. The 7–14 and 25–35
age
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 groups followed similar trends. Starting at roughly 10% and 5%, respectively, in 2000, both groups experienced a steady rise in
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 and ended the period at approximately 30%, showing growing interest in
cinema
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 among children and young adults.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, age, attendance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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