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The bar chart shows the world production output from Asia, Europe, and the rest of the world in five different years

The bar chart shows the world production output from Asia, Europe, and the rest of the world in five different years
The bar chart illustrates
proportion
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 of output produced in
Asia
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,
Europe
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 , and
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other countries
during
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 160 years.
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,
Asia
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 and
Europe
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 have been dominating
,
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until 1920 , when the rest of the world began to outpace
Asia
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.
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, the remaining countries surpassed
Asia
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 and reached
Europe
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,
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in 1920.
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,
however
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, the world’s rising trend didn’t continue , slightly decreasing its figure In 1840,
Asia
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 and
Europe
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covered
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accounted for
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 the most output , having 50 and 40
percent
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per cent
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, respectively.
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Subsequently
, in 1880,
Europe
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 dropped to approximately 45% ,which was 15% more than
Asia
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’s and 20% more than other regions’ values. During the next 40-year period,the rest of the world overtook
Asia
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 by 10% and
were
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 20% lower than
Europe
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.Afterwards,in 1960 ,
world’s
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the world’s
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 output became as much as
Europe
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’s ,at about 38%, and
were
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was
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 just over 12% more than
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Asia
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Asia's
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. The tendency,
nevertheless
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, ended in 2000 , when
world’s
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the world’s
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 figure dropped to 32%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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