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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
the
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 line graph presents data on the average monthly percentage variation in prices of three metals-copper, nickel and zinc throughout 2014.
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, nickel experienced the most dramatic fluctuations,
while
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 copper remained the most stable. All three materials dropped in the middle of the
year
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 and recovered by
december
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December
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. Nickel started the
year
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 with the highest rise, reaching about 6% in
january
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January
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,
then
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 fell each month until
june
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June
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, when it dropped to nearly -3.5%. After that, it increased a bit in
july
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July
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 and stayed constant until
decline
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a decline
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 in
octobre
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October
, and ended the
year
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grow
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 of over 3%. Copper rested quite stagnant throughout the 12 months.
it
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 began at about 2%, continued near 1% until
may
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May
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, and
decline
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declined
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 below zero in
june
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June
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 and
july
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July
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 before rising again.
zinc
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Zinc
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 had a small climb early in the
year
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,
then
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 declined until
june
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June
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to
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 -3%, and
finally
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 went up again in
december
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December
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 with the
others
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 two metals.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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