The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010.

The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010.
The graph illustrates how many people used public
transport
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in 5 different cities over the 10-year period.
Contries
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Countries
include Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Perth and Adelaide.
Overall
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, in
Brisbane
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Brisbane,
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there was a significant growth
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in of
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of usage
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usage of
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city
transport
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so that it even exceeded the historically high percentage in Sydney. Others had remained stable for 10 years. Beginning with the most
urbanized
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urbanised
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cities, the
Sydney's
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Sydney
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transport
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system was used by 20% of citizens
and
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, and
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moreover
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, since
2007
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2007,
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the percentage
had
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has
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increased
reaching
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, reaching
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close to 25%. At the same time,
Melboure
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Melbourne
demonstrated
the
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a
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similar popularity of public transportation
having
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, having
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around 18-19%
gerular
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regular
users over the given period.
By contrast
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, only 15% of Brisbane's population used city
transport
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in 2000, but it had markedly grown
up
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apply
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to 27% by 2010.
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, despite a slight rise in
usage public
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public transport usage
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transport
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from 2004 until 2007, Perth mostly showed 10% of users,
while
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Adelaide
only
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had only
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about 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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