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The chart below shows the average earnings of people in various areas of work in one country in 2000 and 2010. The table shows the average salary for all sectors in the same years. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate.

The chart below shows the average earnings of people in various areas of work in one country in 2000 and 2010. The table shows the average salary for all sectors in the same years. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate.
The given graph illustrates the
salry
Correct your spelling
salary
 of each person in the industry from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
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,
hold
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apply
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the highest position
throughout
Verb problem
held throughout
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 the survey period was financial services.
However
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, tourism had the lowest salary despite the other growth. In the remaining industries
fluctuating
Punctuation problem
, fluctuating
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 on average, external telecommunications
Verb problem
is fierver
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fierver
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fiercer
 than
other
Correct article usage
the other
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 two fields. With an average income of over 120, it was easy to top the rankings.
Although
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 in 2000 it
around
Verb problem
was around
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 150, to 2010 it
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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Change preposition
by nearby
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nearby
Use the right word
nearly
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 130.
In contrast
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 to that rise
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in rate
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rate tourism almost had
Correct word order
tourism rate had almost
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 been left behind for two years only about 20. Telecommunications in 2000 had
average
Correct article usage
an average
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earning
Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
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about
Change preposition
of about
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 65,
while
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to
Change preposition
by
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 2010 it
rised near
Verb problem
rose to nearly
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 80. Despite the growth, the administration and
retall
Correct your spelling
retail
 shops
stilled
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still
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not
Verb problem
did not
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 equal

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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