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The chart below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart below provides data about how many
hours
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 per week
people
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 work in four
differnt
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different
 European countries
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, namely
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France
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, Sweden,
Denmark
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 and
UK
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the UK
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in
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, in
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 2002.
Overall
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, the percentage of
people
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 who worked 36-40
hours
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 was the highest,
while
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 the
index
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 of
who
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those who
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 worked less than 14
hours
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 was the lowest among these
contries
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countries
. In 2002, in
France
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working
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 about 35
hours
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 was the most popular with just 40%,
while
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 in
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Denmark
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Denmark,
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 most
people
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prepfered
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preferred
 to work no more than 40
hours
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 with
with
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apply
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70%. The percentage of job owners in
France
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,
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apply
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who worked 14
hours
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 per week was just under 10% and
this
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 figure was the least one.
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, in
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Denmark
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Denmark,
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people
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also
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 avoided working 14
hours
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, and the percentage was nearly 10%. In
Sweaden
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Sweden
, working from 36 to 40
hours
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,
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apply
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 was more
wide-spread
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widespread
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with
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, with
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 80% and
this
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index
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 was higher than in
UK
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the UK
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where
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, where
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this
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index
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 was only 50%. In
adition
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addition
,
number
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the number
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 of workers who spent time at work no more than 45
hours
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 was 25% and
this
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 was
a
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the
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 average figure.
However
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, as it was in
France
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 and
Denmark
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, the lowest amount of
hours
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 was from 1 to 14 per week
and
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, and
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this
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index
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 was just below 10% in
Sweaden
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Sweden
 and
UK
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the UK
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, people, france, denmark, index with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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