Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

Everybody should follow a vegan diet and lifestyle because eating beef can
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severe health problems.
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point of view, I believe that consuming protein has some benefits
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people.
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, that’s an absolutely incorrect idea. Just like humans, the world has a cycle too. That period is necessary for humans, animals and
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plants. Every animal must receive the food it needs.
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every living creature eats its smaller ones. In
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meat can be a good source of protein and
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. Nutrients that can be harder to get from a vegetarian regime. Some animal products might be healthier and more sustainable.
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, food is an important part of
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, life and definitely tradition. Forcing everyone to follow
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lifestyle could be disrespectful and ridiculous. Especially areas that
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plants way more expensive.
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health conditions, allergies can
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following
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vegan
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a vegan
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diet. In conclusion,
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vegan
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a vegan
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diet has beneficial and environmental
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I don’t believe
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for everyone
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it people can do other things as well
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instance: balanced diets and make informed choices based on their personal needs.

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You present a clear opinion against a vegetarian diet.
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Your conclusion summarizes your ideas well.

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