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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
There is no
denning
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denying
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 that social media and the
internet
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alows
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allow us
 to stay
touch
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in touch
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 all the time . Nowadays, the
internet
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is
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has
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be come
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become
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 a global revelation
due to
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 many reasons.
In
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On
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Other
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the Other
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hands
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hand
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 maybe effect
negativly
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apply
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on
the
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apply
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people
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 . In
this
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esssay
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essay
, we will going to intress discuss more about
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internet
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the internet
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 and the
ampeet
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impact
 of the
internet
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 in the world.
Body paragraph 1
There are many reasons
make
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that make
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internet
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the internet
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 a
benefit
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beneficial
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equipment
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tool
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 for
the
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apply
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society .
On
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One
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 of these benefits is
you
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that you
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 can learn from
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internet
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the internet
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.
For example
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, when
COVID 19
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COVID-19
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attract
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attacked
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 the world, all the schools in the UAE
choose
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chose
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 to
studing
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study
in
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at
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 home
throug
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through
 the
internet
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.
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Secondly
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Secondly,
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 you can
connected
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connect
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 with your family, friends and your teachers. In other
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way
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words
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, the
internet
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alows
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allows
to
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us to
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connected
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connect
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 to
people
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 easily and in a
sample
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simple
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way
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.
Body paragraph 2
In
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On
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other
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the other
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 hand ,
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internet
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the internet
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 can be a negative
equipment
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influence
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for
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on
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the
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apply
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people
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 .
Firstly
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, there are some bad things
of
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about
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internet
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the internet
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. Some
people
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 use social
medi
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media
 in an
unhelthy
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unhealthy
way
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, they
used
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use
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 the
internet
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 all
the
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apply
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day
which
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, which
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is
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apply
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encourages
people
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 not to socialise .
Secondly
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 and social media
maybe
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may be
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enhaceing
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enhancing
 to be
lazy
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a lazy
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 person.
Every thing
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Everything
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 is
availble
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available
 for you on the
internet
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.
In
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At
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this
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 point, your health will
effect
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be affected
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 in a
worss
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worse
way
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, you should to moving
due to
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 not
be
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getting
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 sick.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
i
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I
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 would
sad
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say
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 that
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internet
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the internet
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is depending
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depends
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 on the person who
used
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uses
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 it
,
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;
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 if he
use
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uses
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 it in a better
way
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, he will get
possitive
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positive
 results
of
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from
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internet
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the internet
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. In my opinion, the
internet
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 is a very significant thing that we
had
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have
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 at 21
centery
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century
 whist which is
distrubuting
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contributing
 to
improve
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improving
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 the world.

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spelling/grammar
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. Words like 'defining' or 'negatively' were misspelled. Clear writing makes your ideas stronger.
structure
Your introduction should include your opinion clearly. It is important to state your view on the topic right away.
coherence
Try to use more linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'on the other hand'. This helps connect your ideas better.
examples
You provided examples like the COVID-19 situation which helps support your points.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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