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With a growing world population one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the rapid growth in the global population, ensuring
food
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 security
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 become a major concern. Some people believe that
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genetically modified
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GM
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foods
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presents
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present
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 a promising solution to
this
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 crisis.
Although
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GM
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food
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help
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helps
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adrress
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address
 the
food
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 shortages in several countries, I partially agree with
this
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 statement as these
foods
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 can raise health and environmental concerns in
long
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 term. On one hand, there is no doubt
about
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that
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food
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 the potential to significantly boost
food
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 production. They are often engineered to resist pests, harsh weather and poor
soil
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.
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, many traditional
crops
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such
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 as rice and wheat
were
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often required a large amount
water
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of water
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,
high quality
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of
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apply
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soil
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 to grow and many pesticides to preserve them, but with the help of
GM
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food
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food,
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 it
becomes
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 convenient and
cost effective
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cost-effective
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 to grow these
foods
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 even in
low water
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low-water
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area
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areas
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.
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,
such
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 modifications to
foods
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 not only aid in feeding people but
also
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increasing
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the profits for the farmers.
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,
while
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GM
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crops
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 play a vital role in feeding people,especially in developing countries, there are ongoing debates about
its
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their
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 health and environmental concerns. Many
GM
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 seeds are becoming vulnerable to diseases because of the
modifcations
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modifications
.
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, in order to preserve these
crops
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, farmer
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farmer
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farmers
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 are using strong pesticides, which are leading to
soil
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 and
food
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poision
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poisoning
.
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, there are several
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foods
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are
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that are
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 banned in EU nations because of the contamination in their
soil
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. As these
USA
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US
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farmer
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farmers
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 are trying to grow
GM
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crops
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 with high usage of
chemical
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chemicals
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which
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, which
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 is affecting
land
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the land
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 and plants . In conclusion,
although
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 modifications in seeds
helps
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help
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adrress
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address
food
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 shortages crisis all over the world, it has several negative
impact
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impacts
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 on
soil
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 and
crops
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which
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, which
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 cannot be overlooked,
such
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 as making
crops
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 vulnerable
which
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, which
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 can lead to high usage of pesticides to preserve these
crops
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. A balanced approach, where
government
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the government
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 should improve
distribution
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the distribution
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 of
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foods
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food
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 and invest in the development of biotechnology, can be an effective way to resolve
this
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 issue.

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Task Response
Make sure your introduction clearly states your main opinion and outlines the points you will discuss.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly. This will help your essay flow better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Be careful with spelling and grammatical errors, as they can impact the overall clarity of your writing.
Task Achievement
You provided relevant examples to support your points about GM foods.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a good structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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