In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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various
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societies, inhabitants must pay for hospital
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care in
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order to have medication treatment,
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, it
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been argued that
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to
stopped
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be stopped
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and turned
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be free public service. From my point of view, I totally
agreed
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because there are
citiezens
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citizens
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who can
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not afford it, and
people
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who pay
taxes
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have the right to gain
this
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healthy service. First of all, poor
people
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are existed
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exist
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in every country. If they can't afford the cost of medical care,
there
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they
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will not survive. Hospitals are
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a baisc
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baisc
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basic
need for
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humen
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human
being
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, so it has to be reachable for those who need
it
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them
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.
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, based on
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the BBC
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new
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news
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agency, 12% of
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the world's
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cancer patients
are died
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die
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every year because
the
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they
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can not pay for the medical treatment.
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, there are many diseases
cost
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that cost
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a large amount of money,
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as
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cancer,
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heart
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attacks, and surgical operations.
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, most of the societies are
enforced
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forced
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to pay
taxes
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, so that makes the right to gain the
previliges
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privileges
from their
govenments
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governments
back. In
term
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of
encourge
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encouraging
the
tax payers
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taxpayers
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, there must be regulations that cover their insurance for free, and when
people
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consume the benefits of their
taxes
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back
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, they will pay their
taxes
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happily.
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,
as a result
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of a survey, in
UK
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the UK
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, 70% of
tax payers
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taxpayers
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are satisfied because they are gaining health care
covered
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coverage
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from their government. In conclusion, Health care must be provided costless in order to help the poor
people
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, and to pay back the
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taxes payer
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taxpayers
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.

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grammar
Check your grammar and spelling, for example 'citizens' and 'privileges'.
clarity
Make your ideas clearer. For example, explain how paying taxes relates to receiving health care more.
cohesion
Try to improve the flow between your sentences. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
strength
You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is good for task response.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal coverage
  • equity
  • fundamental human right
  • out-of-pocket expenses
  • financial hardship
  • preventative measures
  • social contract
  • quality of care
  • high demand
  • limited resources
  • tax implications
  • budget priorities
  • universal healthcare systems
  • public health
  • disease burden
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