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Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce cost ad better for the environment. Others believe they are a serious threat to energy

Eco- friendly
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energy
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are
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is becoming more and more widespread in both
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 countries and
first world
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 countries.
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 is commonly suggested that
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 alternate
energy
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 could sharply decrease fees and
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be better for the environment. Others believe that
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 is an alarming threat to
energy
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security
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. In my opinion, I tend to believe that
this
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 green
energy
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 is needed and it could outweigh the
energy
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security
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 phenomenon. On the one hand, it is argued that renewable
energy
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 sources could make the cost drop sharply and
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be beneficial for the environment. The first reason is that renewable
energy
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 source not only cheap but
also
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 very easy to harness which raises a reputation for the eco run trend where
people
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spread
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 awareness of the utilization of solar panels, wind turbines is that renewable
energy
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 sources are not only cheap but
also
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 very easy to harness,. A good illustration of
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 is the news made by Vogue in June
2025
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 has stated that
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the
spread
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 of the' eco run' trend
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 made
significant
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a significant
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 change in the way that
people
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 view
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finite
energy
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source
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sources
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 like coal, gas,
nossel
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and fossil
 fuel.
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,
people
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 have started shifting to
utilize
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this
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 green
energy
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 source not
to
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 help them economically but
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 to aid
mother nature
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.
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, it is strongly believed by others that the widespread
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spread
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 of
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green
energy
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 could raise problems with
energy
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security
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.
People
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 often have
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 opinion
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 the fact that highly intelligent criminals could make use of
this
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 phenomenon and exploit the loopholes of the
energy
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security
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 to
gain
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earn an exponential amount of cash
and
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, and
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 the law is yet to have a sufficient amount of data for these situations.
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, Thames had
interviewed
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the
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investigation
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of
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a criminal who perpetrated the
energy
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 law by illegally installing solar panels and batteries which take
energy
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 from other
people
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's solar panels without their consent. With that
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, the
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 amount of laws that had been broken, the case
it self
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itself
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 should
been
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have been
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 considered a felony, but in the end, the perpetrator only had to pay reparations fees and bail money.
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, the law currently
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does not have the capability to deal with
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 phenomenon. In conclusion, whether the
expand
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 of
alternate
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energy
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reduce
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reduces
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 the cost and
benefit
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benefits
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 the environment
or
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, or
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 it would raise dangerous issues. Personally, I tend to believe that the widespread
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spread
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use
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 of
the
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renewable
energy
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 not only benefits humans economically but
also
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 aids
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nature itself.

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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
You expressed a clear opinion on green energy, showing your stance on the topic. Good job on that!

Your opinion

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