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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pictures depict how the floor plan of a public library transforms after some significant development
now
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, now
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 compared to 20 years ago.
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, it is readily apparent that the place has witnessed a wide variety of alterations, with the most noticeable of which being seen in the establishment of many modern and comfortable facilities. A closer examination reveals that on the right side, the former children's and adult non-fiction
books
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 have been replaced by a lecture
room
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,
an
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adult fiction
books
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 and
self service
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 machines
with
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, with
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adding
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a
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an
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 information desk
on
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in
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 the middle. The enquiry desk has
also
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removed
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been removed
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and
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and transformed
in
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 a cafe with a
rectangle
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 shape for the
room
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. Meanwhile, on the left side, the space previously used for
CD's
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CDs
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 and games now
accomdates
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accommodates
 storytelling events and children's fiction
books
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,
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sofa
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a sofa
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 on the sides, and now it
occupy
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occupies
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 a larger space. The reading
room
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 has been converted to a computer
room
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, and adult fiction
books
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changed
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have been changed
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 to
all
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apply
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references
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reference
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books
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.
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Additionally
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 the central tables and chairs were removed , likely to allow for open space and easier
acess
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access
 to
thee
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the
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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