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Band 3.5

You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write an email to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email: Give details of the purchase Describe the problem Explain why you need a replacement urgently

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 email regarding a shipment I received from your website, the order number is 87398760 , which was on the 17th of October, and it consists of two jeans, one of
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 is black, and the other one is blue with white stripes on the back. Let me explain the situation. I purchased these two pieces because of the advertisement I saw on television, which showed a really different quality of the fabric, and the colours are very bright compared to the photo on the website and the commercial too. I am kindly requesting a replacement for the two jeans with the right colours that I chose when I ordered, and I would really appreciate the improvement of the fabric quality
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I suggest you change your tailors because their work doesn't meet the required standards. Thank you for your consideration. Best regards, Lamar

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Try to make your introduction clearer by including a brief statement of the problem right at the start.
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Make sure to check your closing and add a clear conclusion about what you expect next, like a prompt response or timeline for replacement.
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While your ideas are clear, adding more specific examples about why you need the replacement urgently can strengthen your message, like mentioning an event where you need the clothes.
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You clearly stated the order number and the products with good detail.
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Your email has a polite tone and shows respect, which is good for customer service communication.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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