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The charts below shoe the changesin ownership of electrical appliances and amunt of time spent doiing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting th main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shoe the changesin ownership of electrical appliances and amunt of time spent doiing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting th main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the
percentage
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 of households with electrical appliances and the
number
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 of
hours
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 of housework in households from 1920 to 2019.
It is clear that
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 the proportion of households that were owners of electrical appliances increased in one country over the period shown,
while
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 the amount spending time to housework declined.
Overall
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, the refrigerator, which had a very small
percentage
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 in the initial years, reached a much larger
percentage
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 by the end of the year. In 1940, the proportion of electrical appliances was between 50% and 60%. The figures for the refrigerator and
vacuum
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 cleaner were lower than washing machine in
this
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 year, at about 50% and 55% respectively. In 1960, the proportion of washing machines and
vacuum
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 cleaners rose to 70%.
This
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 year, the
number
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 of
hours
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 of housework was 20 ;
however
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, it decreased enormously. The figure for washing machines and the count for
hours
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 per week were around 64% and 15 , respectively , and they remained at a similar level until 1980. From 1980 to 2000, the
percentage
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 of refrigerators and the
number
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 of
hours
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 per week peaked. In 2000, the
percentage
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 of
vacuum
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 cleaners equalled that of refrigerators. The washing machine's final rate was 73% approximately in 2019. The
number
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 of
hours
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 per week dipped to 10
at the end
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 of the period. In 2019, the rates of
vacuum
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 cleaners and refrigerators were reached

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, number, hours, vacuum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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