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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You are due to start new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter: • Explain your situation • Describe your problems • Tell him or her when you think you can start.

Dear Mr. Trump I am writing to inform you
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 that
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 could not start my new job next week.
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 week I was involved in
car
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a car
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 accident,
due to
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this
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 I got injured and my car is totally damaged.Please accept my sincere apologies for
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 trouble. I think I will be able to start my job next month, because I need time to check up
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 health. Your sincerely, Maxim

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task achievement
Make sure to include all parts of the task clearly. For example, you could explain how the accident affected your ability to work more in detail.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas better by separating different issues into new paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Check your greeting and closing for correct punctuation and formality. 'Your sincerely' should be 'Yours sincerely'.
task achievement
You expressed your situation clearly and apologized, which is important in formal letters.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employer
  • excited
  • new job
  • problems
  • situation
  • personal issue
  • health issue
  • family matter
  • availability
  • resolve
  • timeline
  • start
  • after
  • next week
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