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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040
The supplied line graph depicts information about the share of the population living in urban areas in the Philippines,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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 and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
To begin
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 with, at first
glance
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 it is quite evident that
Malaysia
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 dominated the chart
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 its figure climbed from roughly 30 % in 1970 to over 60 % by 2000, and
then
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 kept rising towards slightly above 80 % in 2040.
However
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, the Philippines started at around 30 %, peaked near 50 % in 1990, and
then
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 edged down to the low-40s by 2020 before a modest rebound is forecast.
Moreover
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, Indonesia remained the least urbanised nation until 2000;
thereafter
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, its percentage surged rapidly, overtaking
Thailand
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 and reaching approximately 60 % by the final year.
Thereafter
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,
Thailand
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 showed a gentler pattern, moving from about 10 % in 1970 to just over 35 % in 2040, with only minor fluctuations in the middle years, respectively. Moving ahead, Indonesia’s urban share swiftly increased after 2000, adding nearly 40 percentage points by 2040.
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 the rate for the Philippines dropped slightly after 1990,
Malaysia
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 rapidly extended its lead and consistently remained the most urbanised country.
In contrast
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,
Thailand
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’s figure stayed almost constant at roughly 30 % between 2000 and 2020 before a small uptick in the final decade.
Hence
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, it is analysed that, over the entire period,
Malaysia
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 registered the maximum proportion of city dwellers,
whereas
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Thailand
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 recorded the minimum.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thereafter".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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