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Band 5

It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by many that buying fewer expensive
clothes
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 is better than wasting your many
in
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 a
lot
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 of cheap
clothes
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.
This
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 essay totally agrees with
this
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 statement because expensive pieces have better
quality
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,
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therefore
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, they will
last
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 longer. The
clothes
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 with hight cost have a special fabric
that is
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 high
quality
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 and lasts for decades, when you decide to have an expensive shirt you will notice that it doesn't change after washing, and it looks much better, since it is made by skilled tailors, investing in
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 pieces would safe you a
lot
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 of money compared to buying a
lot
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 of cheap ones and throw it a way after several weeks,
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, a government survey in the UK found that 64% of people who buy high
quality
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clothes
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 don't need to go shopping for several months after that.
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 choosing to purchase many low cost
clothes
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 is more fun and you, can get a
lot
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 of different designs and colors, the urge to have a
lot
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 of different pieces should always be controled by human because it has many serious consequences,
such
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 as pollution, people throw their old
clothes
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 in the garbage and not donating them because they are damaged,
as a result
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, they pollute the planet,
for instance
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, in the US the pollution rate increased 12% after 3 new cheap
clothes
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 brand have opended their doors. In conclusion, spending money
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high
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high-quality
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quality
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clothes
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 will have a positive impact on your financial situation,
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 purchasing many cheap ones will impact on you
negatively
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task response
Say your view at the start and keep it in the main part. Add a short end that restates your view.
coherence cohesion
Group ideas in blocks. Use linking words to show how ideas fit and how one point leads to another.
evidence
Give simple, true examples. Check facts and keep them easy to follow.
language
Fix big grammar and spelling mistakes. Use easy words.
task response
Make a short ending that sums up your view.
content
The writer shows a clear view and gives a reason for it.
structure
There are reasons given to support the view.
evidence
Some places have examples to back up points.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • long-lasting
  • cost-per-wear
  • economical
  • investing
  • ethical manufacturing
  • transparent
  • exclusivity
  • designs
  • mass-produced
  • accessibility
  • budget
  • fast fashion
  • trends
  • maintenance
  • dry cleaning
  • social status
  • psychological implications
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