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Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?

Some say that communal
libraries
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 shouldn’t spend their limited funds on technological materials
such
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 as documentaries, computer programs, artificial intelligence, e-
books
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 and computers and only provide hardcover
books
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.
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, I completely disagree with
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 point of view because technological
resources
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 are much easier to store. Another very important reason it is convenient to analyse and find
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knowledge in online
resources
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. First of all, the physical capacity of a
library
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 limits the
number
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 of
books
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 it can serve
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 it is possible to access millions of textbooks with a laptop.
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,
libraries
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 could provide only a certain
number
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 of copies they have to their members , and there is a limitation of book variety
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bookshelves
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the bookshelves
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 of the facility
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however
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; however
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, if the
library
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 has an e-book version unlimited
number
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 of readers can access the book at the same time.
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, they could reach more diverse
resources
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 with the help of the web.
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, when I was studying high school , our school
library
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 allowed students to have three
books
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 at a time
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however
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, right now , as a Master's Degree student, I can access more than five million
books
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 from my iPad anywhere.
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, new technological advancements transformed how
libraries
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 function, especially in the past three decades. In the past, users relied on printed catalogues and had to ask librarians to locate a book. With the usage of in-house computer systems,
library
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 members were able to do their own search independently
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 In the
last
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 decade, online databases have allowed users to identify which
libraries
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 hold a specific title without leaving their homes. Nowadays, artificial intelligence tools can analyse vast collections, pinpoint relevant texts, and even highlight the exact pages containing the required information.
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, Master's degree students in Türkiye nearly doubled the
number
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 of publications in recent years. In conclusion, some people say that
libraries
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 must buy hardcover
books
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 like they used to do and shouldn’t invest in high technology
resources
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 like ChatGpt, online platforms and online textbooks.
This
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 essay disagrees with the point of view because the storage capacity of
libraries
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 is considerably smaller than computers , and online
resources
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 are easier to consume for members of
libraries
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task
Make your view clear in the intro and keep to it all through the essay.
task
Give more exact facts or good examples that fit the prompt.
structure
coherence
Use simple link words like and, but, also, however to join ideas.
grammar
Check for small grammar and word form mistakes.
structure
End with a short sum of the main point.
content
You show a clear view on the topic.
content
You use your own life and study talks to give a point.
coherence
Some good flow and links in parts of the piece.
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