Write a letter to your friend who is visiting your country Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose Say what you would like to show your friend in your country

Dear Jennifer, I am so excited that you
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finally
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have finally
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decide
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decided
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to
visit
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India. That’s why I want to discuss the timings of
trip
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the trip
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and
places
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the places
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you want to
visit
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in advance.
Firstly
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, I want you to come in January or March because at
this
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time I can show you some festivals that we celebrate here.
Mainly
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Mainly,
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I want you to explore the culture
not
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, not
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the places, so
festival
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the festival
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season would be the best time.
However
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, we can
visit
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some other places as well in our planning. You can stay at my apartment and we will see some hotels for our
trips
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trip
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.
Lastly
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, I want you to be prepared for the festival of colours that I want to show you here and
also
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the Golden Temple in Amritsar. I hope you are
also
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excited to
visit
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my country
and
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, and
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let me know if you want to add anything to our list. See you soon!
Husan

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grammar
Fix grammar like 'decide' to 'decided' and 'timings of trip' to 'timing of the trip' for better accuracy.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph and use a clear order: time to visit, place to stay, then what you want to show.
content
Give more detail on the types of stay, such as staying with me or hotels, and add a few options.
content
Explain more why January or March is the best time with small reasons (weather, big events).
grammar
Check punctuation and capital letters where needed.
tone
Friendly tone helps a friend feel welcome.
content
It shows what you want to show and invites your friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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