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Band 2.5

Wite about the folawing topic: In the future, nobody will buy printed nowspapers or books because they will bo able to road everything they want onfine without paying. To what extent do you sgree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include arry relerant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the coming era, no one will
willing
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be willing
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 to purchase a hard form of a book or newspaper because everyone should be able to
access
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 and study online via
internet
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the internet
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 in soft form with lower cost or without any payment. I agreed to
above
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the above
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 statement because it is easily and freely
to accessed
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accessible
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. In
the
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apply
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modern people use smartphones and tablets to
access
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 online study material
and
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, and
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 it’s particularly fast and secure. It will
also
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be environmental
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environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly because paper is used in printing and it
made
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is made
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of
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from
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 cutting trees
which
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, which
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 has a bad effect on
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environment
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the environment
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. Also
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also
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also,
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 the waste pages
polluted
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pollute
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 the
environment
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. So
its
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it's
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 better to read online because it is easy to
access
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 and
also
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reduce
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reduces
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 the
affection
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effect
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 on
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environment
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the environment
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. By explaining my opinion,
it
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I
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helps
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help
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to
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apply
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reduce the cost. Buying books and newspapers
are
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is
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 very expensive rather
than
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to
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it
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apply
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studying
online
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online,
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 will more cheaper or almost free. We can
access
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 it
in
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apply
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everywhere and it
help
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helps
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 in
mobilization
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mobilisation
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. We don’t need to carry anything
just
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, just
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 open our laptop or computer to
access
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 the updated news and many studying courses. In conclusion, studying online
reduce
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reduces
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 the cost and
also
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reduce
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reduces
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 the effect on
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environment
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the environment
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. I recommend
to
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that
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 the government
to
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apply
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provide sources and
access
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 to students and teachers that help in their research.

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content
State your view clearly at the start and keep your position in the first paragraph.
structure
Use one main idea per paragraph and begin with a short topic sentence, then add a simple example.
examples
Add real life examples to back up points, for example how schools give online books or how public libraries work.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling, and use short, clear sentences so the idea is easy to follow.
strength
Clear view and focus on cost and the environment.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present.
language
Easy to read because you use simple words.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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