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Many people argu that in order to improve educational quality. High school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it wll lead to losss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both vies and give your Opinion.

It is often argued that, quality of education can be boosted by encouraging
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 to make comments and
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criticise
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 others are strong advocates of believing that
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 will eventually result in losing decorum and respect in study classrooms.
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 my personal opinion that
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 to engage in criticising
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 of respect towards them
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 undisciplined environment to study and
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, by providing an opportunity to evaluate the performance of
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 help scholars to express
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, schools in Scotland have surveys among
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 achievements. In my opinion, it is vital to have
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 by developing their skills. In
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whereas
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students
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receive
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grammar
Fix many grammar and spelling mistakes to make the text clear.
style
Use short, plain sentences. Avoid long or hard words.
structure
Make a clear plan with an intro, two ideas, and a conclusion.
task response
Say your view clearly in the first line and repeat it in the end.
content
Give real, simple examples to back each point.
grammar
Check subject-verb and plural forms.
idea
The essay shows an effort to talk about both sides.
content
There are ideas about how feedback can help students.
structure
The writing tries to give examples to back up points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • constructive feedback
  • educational quality
  • collaborative learning environment
  • demoralized
  • systemic issues
  • long-term benefits
  • undermine authority
  • student misconduct
  • mutual respect
  • structured process
  • guidelines
  • constructive criticism
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