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Academic achievements a school or university is the only true methods of a person's intelligence. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Recently, it has been universally
believe
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 that
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school
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has
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 long been gaining popularity at an incredible rate. Some people state that
school
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 brings the world many benefits,
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 many others argue that its drawbacks should not be ignored, as the effects of
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 matter could influence everyone's life.
This
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 essay will discuss the topic mentioned above,
givie
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giving
 some reasons why
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 has occurred and
examine
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 the consequences of
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worry
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 trend. Those who oppose
school
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 claim that, over the
last
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 decade, there has been a prolific increase in the number of instances of
school
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 lead to illnesses and diseases. Another main and serious issue is time and money.
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, the solution to the problems mentioned above is far-reaching. Meanwhile,
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school
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schools
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 claim that
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school
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schools
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 bring significant benefits to a country since
it
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plays
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 a very useful role in the field of education in general,
enriches
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 people's knowledge and give them the freedom to take action on anything they believe is correct for the country or state.
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,
school
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 has many positive aspects, not only for individuals and families but
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 for the whole society; students can do research using online resources
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Finally
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,
school
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 has many advantages, playing a crucial role
improving
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 many sectors in the state or country.
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, it pushes the stability of the whole world forward. In conclusion,
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 both sides of the argument have their merits.
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, everything in life has pros and cons.
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, people should determine which way to choose.

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task response
Plan a clear intro and a final ending that show your view in one line.
task response
Give one or two clear reasons for each side and add simple examples.
coherence
Use linking words like also, but, so, and to move from idea to idea.
language
Write short, plain sentences. Check big mistakes and fix them.
editing
Check small word use and fix easy errors, like wrong verb or noun for 'school' and 'has'.
content
The writer tries to show both sides.
coherence
Some linking words are used.
structure
There is a closing line.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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