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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
The maps
demonstrates
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demonstrate
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that
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apply
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the transformation of
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town
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the town
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which
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, which
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 was located by the seaside in Templeton
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, throughout
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throughout
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over
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 the period from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
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, there were a lot of trees
be
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removed until 2005 in the
town
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.
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furthermore
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, many convenient facilities were built from 1990 to 2005.
In other words
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, the
town
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 had been developed to be more convenient over the years. It can be obviously seen that,
In
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in
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west
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the west
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 of the river, most of
houses
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the houses
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 were removed and were
reaplced
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replaced
 with apartments. Some of
houses
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the houses
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 were
dispolied
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disposed
more
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of more
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regular
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regularly
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.
Moreover
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, the supermarket was built in 2005. Another salient
changing
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change
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 is that the factory and ferry were established in
southeast
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the southeast
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 in 2005.
Additionally
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, the railway station was extended
to
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on
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large
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a large
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 scale
in
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to
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south
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the south
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 of
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town
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the town
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 until 2005. There were
a
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some
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intersting
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interesting
 things that the
airplane
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aeroplane
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 was built near
school
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the school
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 in 2005.
However
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, some
buliding
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buildings
maintained
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were maintained
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 in the same
location
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location,
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suchas
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such as
hospital
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hospitals
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,
school
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schools
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, and some edifices from 1990 to 2005.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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