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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates
comparison
Correct article usage
a comparison
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 total Police
budget
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 and the sources of providing it for 2017 and 2018.
While
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 the pie charts demonstrate the distribution of budgets
spend
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spent
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 in the same periods of time.
Overall
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, the total
budget
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 of
police
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the police
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 department (PD) had increased
about
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by about
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 14
millions
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million
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.
Furthermore
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, a giant portion of
this
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money
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 had covered the salaries of officers and staff. As it
gathers
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is gathered
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 from the table, even though the government allocated more
money
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 to the PD by about 2.3 m in the following year, the
raise
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rise
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of
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in
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budget
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 came from local taxes by 11.1 m.
However
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, in 2018, the
money
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 from other sources
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such
Punctuation problem
, such
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 as
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grants
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grant
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grant,
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is
Wrong verb form
was
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 almost
as
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apply
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the same as the previous year. The pie diagrams represent a slight change in financial allocation between 2017 and 2018. There was a slight decline
by
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of
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 6% in payments of
department's
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the department's
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 members in 2018, and the same amount of
money
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 (6%)
had
Verb problem
was
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 assigned to the
budget
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 for
technology
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the technology
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 section.
Moreover
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, the building and transport spent were equal in both years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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