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Writing Samples
Band 2

Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. What are the reasons for this? Is thus a positive or negative development?

Some believe that supermarkets sell more and more imported
products
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,
while
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 others think that
local
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locally
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 sourced food should be provided more.
This
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 essay
wil
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will
 discuss both sides and give my opinion.
This
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 issue has positive and negative
aspect
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aspects
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. On one hand, import is
extremely
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an extremely
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 good solution for all of us.
Diffrent
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Different
 types of fruits, vegetables can not be grown all over the world,
this
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 is one the the reasons. So we can buy everything we need all the time. Some
of
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countries specialise only in
few
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a few
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 types of
products
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, so they have
great
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a great
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 ability to supply
it
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them
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 everywhere.
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Also
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 they make
valuable
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a valuable
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 price for their
products
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. By the
way
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way,
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 it
help
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helps
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 to
uprise
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boost
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economy
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the economy
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 and
give
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create
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 new
working places
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job opportunities
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 for people.
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, local farmers and
manifactures
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manufacturers
 should
be
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also be
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also
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 supported by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 and
citizens
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the citizens
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 of
country
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the country
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. Negative side of imported
products
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 is
reduce
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a reduction
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of
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in
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 working
place
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workplace
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 and possibilities
of
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for
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economy
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the economy
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. Consumer habits: Customers may prefer well-known international brands over local
products
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, leading supermarkets to stock more imported goods.Global trade benefits
:
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.
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 Countries can trade with each other, leading to better prices and availability of different
products
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. Supermarkets can buy cheaper goods from other countries.

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task response
Make the argument clear by giving your view at the end.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Use simple words.
organization
Add a short end paragraph to sum up your view.
content
Give specific examples to back your points.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
structure
There is a clear try to discuss both sides using 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
content
Topic is clear and easy to follow.
content
Some good points about trade and job help.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imported
  • local
  • supermarkets
  • products
  • variety
  • trade
  • demand
  • availability
  • prices
  • consumer
  • fruits
  • vegetables
  • services
  • global
  • brands
  • choices
  • development
  • habits
  • benefits
  • cuisines
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