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An increasing number of people are choosing to change careers during their working ives and some even do so more than once. what reasons might people have to change careers? Do you think this is a positive or negative development for society?

Unsatisfaction with a full-time
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 could become a major problem from a worker's perspective.
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, unsatisfied workers tend to change their
career
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, taking a
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 decision to be given the benefit of satisfaction. In my opinion, taking that
risk
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 should be strategically planned. There are lots of reasons to push a man into changing his
career
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, once, twice, or several times. The dissatisfaction about the amount of money made
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 and the unavailability of open jobs
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 are two essential reasons for looking for another major to work in. Other possible reasons are
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 feeling helpless in the community, the long or late required shifts, and the sheer boredom felt doing
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 specific
career
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.
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 choosing to change
career
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 is a high
risk
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, individuals can limit that
risk
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 by following these steps
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 after finding an open
job
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, ask your manager for permission for a vacation, apply for that
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, if the
job
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 satisfies your needs,
then
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 you can quit your old
job
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.
This
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 method helps you lower the
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 and
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 changing your
career
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 to a more suitable one. In conclusion, dissatisfaction in a full-time
job
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 could become a major problem from a worker's perspective.
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, my personal thought about workers changing their careers multiple times depends on the situation.
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, the possibility of finding another
career
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, individuals should go for it if it is possible
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otherwise
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, they should stick to their current
job
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 is the better option.

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structure
Make a clear plan: say the main reason to change career and whether you think it helps or hurts society, then end with your view.
content
Give 2 or 3 strong reasons and explain them with simple facts or examples.
language
Link ideas well. Use words like first, also, but, however to show order.
content
There is a real attempt to discuss reasons and a personal view.
structure
There are some clear links between ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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