Your department had been given additional work at a company you work for which is creating problems. Write a letter to your manager. In it - Explain what the additional work is. - What problems are you facing due to extra work - Offer a solution to solve You should You do NOT need to write your own address.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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letter to express my
unhapiness
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unhappiness
about the new policy of calling all the customers in order to approve their car loans. To commence with, when we start our shift, there is already a lot of paperwork for us to do. We have to verify income, make sure that the applicants have
valid
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license and insurance card
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along
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, along
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with completing careful checking of the various other documents. And on
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top of
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we now have to call the customers as well. The major issue that arises
due to
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this
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new policy is that we are being yelled
upon
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by the applicants, that why
are we
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we are
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calling them to verify something that they have already talked about.
Secondly
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, we all know that we have to give
decisons
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decisions
on the loan application within 7 days, which is becoming harder, as the people do not answer our calls or hang up thinking us to be
spams
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. I really believe that the best solution to
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issue is segregating the accounts that
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suspicious and
,
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call
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only those customers
instead
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of harassing everyone.
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Also
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the time frame to approve or deny a loan should be increased from 7 days to 10 days. There should be a
seperate
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separate
team assigned to make these phone calls, so that there is no excessive
work load
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on the regular agents. I hope you will consider my suggestions and reply
back
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. Yours sincerely Himani Jaggi

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task response
Task response: The letter tells about the extra work and gives a plan. It would help to add a little more detail about what the new tasks are and give a small example of how they slow work.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The text has long lines. Break strings into shorter lines and use a new paragraph for a new idea. Put the problem, the result, and the plan in order.
task response
The aim to tell about the extra work and the plan is clear.
coherence cohesion
The letter uses a polite tone and has proper closing.
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