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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy.The benefits of nuclear technologies far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? —-

It is an irrefutable fact that nuclear science has more advantages than disadvantages, as it
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 not only resulted in world peace, but has
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 introduced many alternatives to harmful sources. I totally agree with
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 given the reduction of
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complaints
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 from mankind and its major benefits in our world.
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 with, when was the
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 time you heard authorities or citizens
criticizing
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criticising
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 nuclear technologies?
Since
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past
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the past
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 decades, nations have dealt with the consequences of nuclear radiation. As the United Nations have reached consensus on the usage of nuclear innovations,
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 as nuclear weapons. No country has the authority to use it unless in extreme cases, that was discussed in obscure documents.
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, a survey was conducted by university students,
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 asked professors about their opinions
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 nuclear
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 are numerous benefits that prove how useful nuclear discoveries are. One of the prominent impacts is that it has led to a more eco-friendly alternative for energy generation. Nuclear power, one of humanity’s best innovations, produces
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 amount of energy without harming the earth. Unlike other sources
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 as oil
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 releases harsh gases into the atmosphere, leading to air pollution. It has been reported that, in Russia, their air pollution has decreased rapidly by 45% since they made nuclear power a main source
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 electricity.
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, I strongly agree that nuclear technologies have brought more advantages than disadvantages, as nations have worked
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together to use
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them
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 in our
favor
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, and
also
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 it is undeniable how useful it has been to us, in terms of
environment
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the environment
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task response
State your view clearly and give a short plan. Use one idea per paragraph and end with a short conclusion that sums up your view.
coherence
Use topic sentences in each paragraph. Link ideas with clear transitions like 'Moreover', 'Also', 'However' but keep them simple.
content
Strong position is clear at the start.
structure
There is a basic structure with intro, body, and conclusion.
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