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In today's world private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct the scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 era of modernisation, it is often observed
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that the private sectors fund majority of the scientific research than
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sectors
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. It is probably
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 the fact that there is considerable redistribution of resources into healthcare, education and infrastructure. From my perspective, I ardently am
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 of
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 assertion, will elucidate my position with merits and demerits in the ensuing paragraphs culminating in a well-founded conclusion. Initiating with the best possible benefits, the most significant advantage is, with more private companies paying for the
reasearch
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research
, it can pave
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 for
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 number of inventions,
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, promoting
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 growth of the nation. To exemplify, in cases like
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the Covid-19
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Covid-19
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COVID-19
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 virus infection
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, where-in
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where-in
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 every researcher is actively looking for an antidote, the higher the number of
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experiments, the higher the chances of finding a cure.
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, with increasing sectors promoting
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, the job opportunities are certainly
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.
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, unemployment and poverty in
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 eradicated to a certain extent. On the paradoxical side, there are certain drawbacks with
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 approach,
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 sector
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 for these experiments, there could
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 underlying selfish motive behind it.
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, not every company will have a
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 attitude
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 they might simply be doing
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 to attract international investors
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 can invest millions of dollars into it.
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, there have been instances where
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 has been doubted that coronavirus
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 originated from
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 is a
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 virus,
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 intentionally released to harm the people.
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, there is a
definitve possibilty
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definite possibility
 of exploiting
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. In conclusion, I am of the conviction that the aforementioned arguments strongly bolster my viewpoint on research funding. The multi-faceted nature of the topic requires careful consideration, and after weighing the evidence, it becomes apparent that careful public funding is the most logical stance to adopt in the context of our ever-changing world.

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task
Make your main view clear early in the essay and restate it in the last paragraph.
coherence
Use one idea per paragraph and start with a short topic sentence to make the flow easier to follow.
development
Add more facts or easy examples to support your point and explain how they show your view.
structure
There is a basic plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.
content
An example (Covid-19) is used to back a point.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • private sector
  • government funding
  • technological innovation
  • competitive nature
  • profitable outcomes
  • conflict of interest
  • corporate bias
  • economic stimulation
  • public interest
  • non-profitable
  • public welfare
  • commercial applications
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