The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart provides data regarding the percentages of principal aims of doing exercises by citizens aged between 20 and 50,
whereas
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the pie chart shows the
places
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where they perform them.
It is clear that
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people the most commonly exercise for recreation, with muscle toning in the second place. It is
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evident that the most popular
places
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are gyms or parks. Focusing first on the main purposes of exercising, 40% of people do
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for recreation,
while
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a quarter of them aim to tone their muscles.
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around 10% of participants want to lose
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weight or improve their mood, just under 15% of them try to prevent diseases. As for the venues for
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activity, over a
third,
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35%, exercise in gyms, which is 15% higher than those preferring parks. Regarding the remaining
places
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, which are playgrounds, public
sport
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venues, and other public
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,
less
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fewer
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than
two fifths
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two-fifths
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of people chose them.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words places with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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