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Band 3.5

Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to you friend. In your email: Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn Explain how your friend could learn this sport Suggest that you learn this sport together.

Dear Paul, I'm writing
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 email about a new sport for you that I highly recommend, because you really have the important qualities for it, which is basketball. As I remember, you are 183 cm tall, and you were a big fan of that basketball athlete at primary school , that I don't remember his name. You can master
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 by learning from his techniques and applying them
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 exercising with others
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 learn from them too. I would love to learn
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 sport with you, since I really enjoy spending time with you, and I
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 enjoy competing with you because I always win! And the more enjoyable thing is watching you get mad. I'm really excited to do
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 with you because we
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 out for a long time, and
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 will bring up great memories we had when we were young. Please let me know. Best regards, Lamar

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task
Make the plan of the sport clearer. Say what sport to pick, and give steps to learn it. Give 2 or 3 easy steps.
coherence
Link ideas with short words. Use clear order. Each part of the email should have one main idea.
grammar
Check small grammar points. Use short sentences. Add pauses with periods and commas.
tone
Keep the tone friendly but not bossy. Do not brag. Write as a friend giving help.
content
Add a small plan to learn together, like a first week plan and a goal for both of you.
task response
The email has a clear aim to tell a friend what sport to try.
tone
It shows a friendly link with the friend and wants to learn together.
content
Some facts are simple and easy to read, like the height detail.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advice
  • recommend
  • suitable
  • learn
  • coach
  • lessons
  • tutorial videos
  • practice
  • tennis club
  • group
  • schedule
  • regularly
  • participants
  • tournaments
  • friendly matches
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