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Some people say that the bicycle is a good means of transport. Others say that the bicycle has many disadvantages. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In today's world of modernity, most
of
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people
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 commute by their own vehicles
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such
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 as cars
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while
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 some believe that the
bicycle
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 is
a
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 best means of transportation.
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 commuting by
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bicycle
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 has both worthwhile and disadvantageous causes, I believe that it is convenient only for short routes but not for longer ones. First of all, bicycles are
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environmental
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 friendly means of transportation as it does not cost any fuel, and do not emit any harmful gases and pollutants
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 in turn
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 it more sustainable.
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, it is very beneficial for health purposes, it is a healthy mode of
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, prevents form various health problems
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 as cardiac issues, physical illnesses and healthy lifestyle. On top of
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, it is easy to navigate through traffic, no specific space is required to park the bicycles
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 anybody can easily congest in crowded cities
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 motor vehicles face
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this
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 issues all the time. As a salient example,
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people
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ride
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who ride
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bicycle
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 has much
lesser
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fewer
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 health and fitness problems than
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people
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 who commute by
another
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other
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 modes of
transport
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. Despite the positive reasons mentioned above, there are numerous negative aspects of
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bicycle
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bicycles
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. Bicycles are not suitable for long distances as they require more time and energy compared to
motorized
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transport
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 to travel.
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,
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 it is suitable in good weather,
but
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in harsh weather conditions
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 as rain, extremely hot
season
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, it is not an appropriate mode.
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, it has one more disadvantage as it is difficult to travel on it with heavy loads of bags and if multiple
people
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 are travelling.
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, a family cannot travel by
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bicycle
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 if there are more than 2 members
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 they need a
motorized
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transport
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. As a way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm that, in today's lifestyle, where every single thing needs to be done fast and
quick
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,
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bicycle
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 is not suitable for all the daily tasks nowadays. They can be used only for limited activities as suggested above.

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task response
You answer the task by giving two views and your own view. Try to be more clear and to the point.
coherence
Your essay has good ideas but some parts are not well linked. Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
grammar
Some spelling and grammar errors. Check common word form and subject-verb match. Use simpler sentence forms.
lexical
Use real examples that are easy to see. This makes your point stronger.
structure
Paragraphing is okay, but your opening line and closing line can be clearer.
content
Gives both sides of the view and a clear personal stance.
content
Uses examples about health and air use.
structure
Paragraphs help to see the two views.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmentally friendly
  • sustainable transportation
  • cardiovascular fitness
  • healthcare costs
  • cost-effective
  • maintenance costs
  • fuel
  • navigate through traffic
  • parking space
  • congestion
  • limited carrying capacity
  • safety concerns
  • dedicated bike lanes
  • long distances
  • motorized transport
  • impact cyclist safety
  • harsh weather conditions
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