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The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph depicts the number of adults in thousands participating in major sports in one area in 1997 and 2017.The major
sport
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sports
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 activities are Tennis ,Basketball,Cricket,Golf,Swimming,Football and Rugby.
According to
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 the
graph
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graph,
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 it has been observed that Tennis has been
highest
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the highest
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 sports activity done by adults in both 1992 and
2017
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2017,
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of
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with
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 about fifty thousand and
mid fifty
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mid-fifty
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 thousand.It can be seen that there has been
decline
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a decline
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 in participation
of
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in
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 Cricket from
mid 20,000
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mid-20,000
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 in 1997 to
aproximately
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approximately
 5000 in 2017.On the
other-hand
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other hand
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Swimming
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, Swimming
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 participation has been consistently the same in both years
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, of
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of
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with
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 an
estmate
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estimated
of
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apply
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35000 people. It should be noted that football and Rugby participation had increased upwards to
aproximately
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approximately
 48000 and 49000 in
2017
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2017,
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 respectively
from
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, from
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 31000 and 32000 in 1997.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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