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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicales will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicales outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that all
kind
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kinds
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 of
vihicales
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vehicles
 will be driverless. In their
opinion
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opinion,
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 only passengers will be inside without
driver
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the driver
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. In my
view
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view,
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 some of the cars would be fully
controled
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controlled
 by AI in the future.
This
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
self driving
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self-driving
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 cars, trucks and buses. On
one
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the one
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 hand, modern control technology will save a lot of money and time.
For example
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, driverless trucks can work 24 hours without stopping.
This
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 solution can be very effective and cheaper than
traditional
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the traditional
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 way of cargo transportation.
This
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 way of transportation already
exist
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exists
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, as I know
in
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, in
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 some countries it is
testing
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being tested
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 nowadays.
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, we need more special types of roads for
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this
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these
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 driverless
vihicales
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vehicles
. Dangerous situations could happen
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at every
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every
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any
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 moment. I think
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this
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these
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 cars should be separated from public roads, and be
more
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apply
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safer. I do not trust
to
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apply
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modern technologies at
high
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a high
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 level. A lot of
acsidents
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accidents
 may
caused
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be caused
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 by
self control
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self-controlled
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 transport.
To sum up
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,
this
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 way of transportation of cargo and people has a lot of
really
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real
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 advantages.
Such
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 as
useability
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usability
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 and
effectivity
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effectiveness
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.
However
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, it should be safe for humans and completely tested for a long time. I think in the near future
about
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, about
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 half of modern transport will be automatic. I hope I will be able to test all
benefits
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the benefits
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 of them for myself.

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State your view clearly in the introduction and keep it in the end; make your position easy to see.
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Add 2 or 3 main ideas and explain each with a simple reason or example.
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Use linking words to move from one idea to the next; start a new paragraph for a new idea.
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Make each paragraph have one main idea; use short, clear sentences to join thoughts.
overall
The topic is clear and you try to talk about both sides.
overall
You give some real examples, like trucks working long hours.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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