Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email: Describe where you lived when you were a student at the university Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

Dear Sara, I'm writing
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you are studying at the university. When I was a student, I lived in the same neighbourhood as the university, and that saved me a lot of time and effort. I didn't have to use any transportation services since the apartment was so close to the university. I would strongly recommend that you go there and explore your options,because photos on websites tend to be unrealistic compared to the reality of those accommodations, and you may pay a lot more than what
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. One thing that you should consider is choosing your roommate carefully,
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would have a significant impact on your performance in your courses, because some of them prefer to have a party every weekend
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of studying, and you will end up annoyed and disturbed. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Lamar

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Add clear steps for finding a place, such as check campus housing, use trusted sites, visit in person, and ask current students for tips.
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Give more exact advice on what to look for in a place, like distance, cost, lease terms, and safety.
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Keep a respectful tone when warning about issues with roommates, and avoid too strong claims.
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Straightforward tone and friendly email style.
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Good example of near-to-campus living and time saved.
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Includes a useful warning about photos and cost.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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