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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the average carbon dioxide release per person in 4
european
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European
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 countries
on
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over
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 the
40 year
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40-year
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old
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period.
Overall
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, the number of emissions declined in the
UK
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 and
Sweden
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, and increased in others.
While
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 the number of emissions grew in three countries, it stayed the same in the
UK
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 from 1967 to approximately 1978. In these years, the
figuere
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figure
 in
Sweden
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 peaked at around 10.5 metric
tones
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, following a massive decline. After the observed period of roughly 11 years,
Sweden
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 and the
UK
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 started decreasing
its
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their
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 digits
,
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;
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however
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, Italy and Portugal saw a steady
growh
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growth
.
While
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 the
UK
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 was lessening
realy
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really
 consistently, the 3 other nations
expirienced
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experienced
 a
structure
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 break in about 1987, where
Sweden
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 started lowering
slower
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more slowly
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, Italy increasing more calmly, and Portugal more sharply.
At the end
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 of the
40 year old
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40-year-old
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 period,
Sweden
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, despite the fact that it was the second leading nation, ended up at the same spot as
Portugal
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Portugal,
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that
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which
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 used to be the lowest one. The United Kingdom saved its leading position without yielding it at least once,
while
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 being close to it in around 1978.
The
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Italy
with
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, with
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 its steady
growth
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growth,
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 became the second leading country in carbon dioxide emissions at
approxiamately
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approximately
 8 metric
tones
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,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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